雅思写作 · 2026-05-31
雅思大作文利弊类题目修改：进口食品是否是积极发展
课堂推进：Miya老师先带宇墨同学复盘周五语法改错练习中的几个小错误，重点确认介词后动词形式、词性搭配和名词单复数。
老师处理：指出 depend on 后面要接 doing；maintain 后面应接 balance；daily diet（日常饮食）这里不加 s。
学生原始输出：domestic farmers heavily depend to sell their crops to local residents；maintain the fragile environment；daily diets
老师示范 / 修改方向：heavily depend on selling their crops；maintain the fragile balance；importing food from overseas enriches our daily diet
复习抓手：depend on 后面接 doing，不接 to do；maintain（维持）后面要接真正被维持的对象，如 balance（平衡）；daily diet（日常饮食）作为固定表达时通常不加 s
课堂推进：老师说明这篇 Task 2 目前不能只看语法，开头段偏离题干、内容逻辑和模板选择也会影响分数。
老师处理：把学生原文和题干进行对照，解释题目问的是消费者在超市买到全球食品这件事是好是坏，而不是政府是否允许。
学生原始输出：the authority should allow people to do something
老师示范 / 修改方向：消费者能在超市买到世界各地生产的食品，可以直接沿用题干，只做很小的改写，例如把 buy 改成 purchase。
复习抓手：开头段不要新增题干没有的主体；authority（政府/当局）不能随便替换 supermarket 或 consumers；Task 2 开头可以照抄题干核心信息，再做有限改写
课堂推进：老师讲解了安全改写题干的三种方式：保留原句核心、替换简单同义词、做主被动转换。
老师处理：示范把 buy 改成 purchase，也说明可以用被动语态或 should be available to consumers 来表达“消费者可以买到”。
学生原始输出：weather consumers and purchase；food produced all over the world should be purchased by consumers
老师示范 / 修改方向：consumers can purchase food produced all over the world in supermarkets；food produced all over the world should be available to consumers in supermarkets
复习抓手：purchase（购买）可以替换 buy；available to consumers（消费者可获得的）比强行写 should be purchased 更自然；改写题干时要做最小改动，避免跑题
课堂推进：老师要求利弊类作文开头段直接亮明态度，不要只写“要权衡利弊”。
老师处理：建议删掉 some people think... but... 的冗余部分，直接用 from my perspective 表明利大于弊或弊大于利。
学生原始输出：weighed advantage and disadvantages
老师示范 / 修改方向：From my perspective, the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.
复习抓手：positive or negative development 题型必须给出明确判断；outweigh（超过）用于表达利大于弊或弊大于利；模板要简洁，把字数留给主体段论证
课堂推进：老师带学生把第一主体段设置为承认负面影响，并提供简单版和升级版表达。
老师处理：示范 indeed we must admit that... 和 it is indisputable that... 两个层级的表达，并讲解 exert harmful impacts。
学生原始输出：Doing something has negative impact
老师示范 / 修改方向：Indeed, we must admit that doing something has a negative impact. / It is indisputable that doing something may exert harmful impacts.
复习抓手：indisputable（毋庸置疑的）可替换 we must admit that；exert impacts（产生影响）比 has effect 更高级；harmful（有害的）可以替换 negative（负面的）
课堂推进：老师指出第一个负面论点应先写结果，再解释原因：进口食品可能影响当地生态，因为它可能带来外来昆虫或病原体。
老师处理：把学生原来从“食物里有虫子”开始的表达，调整为先说 imported foods may pose a threat to the local ecological environment。
学生原始输出：food may be carry some creatures；insects or animals；destroy the local environmental balance
老师示范 / 修改方向：Imported foods may pose a threat to the local ecological environment, since these foods may carry some creatures, such as invasive insects or pathogens, from other countries.
复习抓手：英文议论文常先写结论，再写原因；pose a threat to（对……构成威胁）可用于风险表达；pathogens（病原体）比 insects or animals 逻辑更准确；disrupt（扰乱）比 destroy（摧毁）程度更合适
课堂推进：老师肯定了学生关于当地农民收入的论点，并补充第三个关于食品安全和过度依赖的论点需要加指示词。
老师处理：建议用 second、finally、additionally 或 even worse 标出论点层级，并把食品安全风险写得更清楚。
学生原始输出：it also easily too dependent on other countries；at critical moments your competitors will use this to post a threat to you
老师示范 / 修改方向：Over-reliance on imported foods may also lead to over-reliance on other countries, posing a serious risk to national food security.
复习抓手：每个分论点前要有清楚的指示词；over-reliance（过度依赖）可用于说明依赖风险；national food security（国家食品安全）比笼统写 threat 更明确
课堂推进：老师说明第二主体段不是完全反驳上一段，而是在承认负面影响的基础上说明正面影响更重要。
老师处理：解释 nevertheless 的使用，并提供 does not necessarily mean that... 的句型。
学生原始输出：country's opinion
老师示范 / 修改方向：Nevertheless, such arguments do not necessarily mean that this trend would not exert any beneficial impact.
复习抓手：nevertheless（然而）用于承接让步后的转折；第二主体段要写自己更赞同的一边；承认负面影响不等于否定正面影响
课堂推进：老师指出 make somebody to do 是语法错误，并帮助学生把“促进经济发展”和“消费者选择更多”之间的逻辑重新连接。
老师处理：建议用 allow consumers to have more choices 或 make it possible for consumers to purchase a variety of products，并把 which 改成 since 或重新排序。
学生原始输出：promote economic development which can make individuals to buy
老师示范 / 修改方向：This trend can promote economic development, since it allows consumers to have more choices and encourages them to purchase more products in supermarkets.
复习抓手：make somebody do something 不加 to；allow somebody to do something 可以加 to；which 连接结果，since（因为）连接原因，不能乱用；经济论证可以从选择增加、消费增加、就业机会增加展开
课堂推进：老师帮助学生把文化交流、生活质量提升和物美价廉的选择整理成更自然的正面论证。
老师处理：纠正 form、on the other hand、government allows supermarkets 等表达问题，建议用 additional benefit 和 enhance the quality of life。
学生原始输出：buying products made in other countries is a form；in other hand；the government allow supermarket to buy；make progress of the quality of life
老师示范 / 修改方向：An additional benefit would be that buying products made in other countries is a form of cultural communication. It can also enhance the quality of life by providing consumers with more affordable and higher-quality choices.
复习抓手：a form of（……的一种形式）用于表达形式；on the other hand 表示相反关系，不适合普通并列好处；enhance（提升）可替换 improve；quality of life（生活质量）可以和 affordable（负担得起的）及 higher-quality（更高质量的）选择连接
课堂推进：老师讨论了结尾如何证明利大于弊：可以写政府通过配额、政策或补贴解决问题，而不是只说“控制在合理范围内”。
老师处理：给出 in summary 和 I contend that 的结尾表达，并建议把 import quotas、stricter rules、subsidy projects 作为问题可解决的依据。
学生原始输出：只要控制在合理范围内其实就是好事
老师示范 / 修改方向：In summary, I contend that the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages, as the problems mentioned above could be resolved if the authority controls import quotas and implements stricter rules or subsidy projects.
复习抓手：in summary（总之）可用于结尾段；I contend that（我认为）比 I think 更正式；import quotas（进口配额）可以解释“控制数量”；implement stricter rules（执行更严格规则）可以说明问题能被解决
课堂推进：老师要求学生课后把这篇作文改成英文版 2.0，先修正语法、拼写和模板，再把论证顺序调整为先结果后原因。
老师处理：安排学生在 grammar 工具里继续改作文，并说明下一步也会把小作文做成作业形式继续修改。
学生原始输出：我大作文我没有时间构思...我打的慢
老师示范 / 修改方向：把模板固定、思路固定，通过反复打范文来节省考场时间。
复习抓手：课后完成大作文英文版 2.0；优先修正语法、拼写、跑题和逻辑顺序；大作文要通过固定模板减少构思时间；小作文至少要写满 150 词
老师处理：老师判断当前总分受小作文未写完影响较大，大作文主要问题是跑题风险、语法拼写错误和模板不稳定。
复习抓手：当前小作文未完成会显著拉低分数；大作文从 5 到 6 的关键是减少语法拼写错误并避免开头跑题；模板固定可能帮助学生节省时间
本节课先复盘了语法改错练习，重点修正 depend on doing、maintain the fragile balance、daily diet 等表达。
老师明确指出开头段不能加入题干没有的 government / authority（政府/当局），要围绕 consumers can buy food produced all over the world 这个核心来写。
课堂重点建立了利弊类大作文模板：开头直接表态，第一主体段承认自己不太赞同的一边，第二主体段写自己更赞同的一边，结尾说明为什么利大于弊。
老师反复强调英文议论文要先写结果再写原因，例如先写 imported foods may pose a threat to the local ecological environment，再解释可能携带 invasive insects（外来入侵昆虫）或 pathogens（病原体）。
课后任务是把这篇作文改成英文版 2.0，先修正语法和拼写，再把模板、逻辑和论证顺序固定下来。
domestic farmers heavily depend to sell their crops to local residents
原句保留；课堂讲解为 depend on 后面要接 doing。
maintain the fragile environment
原句保留；课堂讲解为 maintain the fragile balance。
the authority should allow people to do something
原句保留；课堂指出题干没有 government / authority。
food may be carry some creatures
原句保留；课堂要求先写结果，再写原因。
promote economic development which can make individuals to buy
原句保留；课堂讲解 make somebody do 不加 to，且 which 的逻辑关系不合适。
make progress of the quality of life
原句保留；课堂建议改为 enhance the quality of life。
以下为按课堂已讲方向整理的课后复习改进版：保留课堂确定的立场、论点和表达方向，重点使用老师讲过的模板、逻辑顺序和词汇。
Nowadays, the issue regarding whether consumers should be able to purchase food produced all over the world in supermarkets has been sharply discussed. From my perspective, the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.
Indeed, it is indisputable that imported foods may exert some harmful impacts. First and foremost, imported foods may pose a threat to the local ecological environment, since these foods may carry invasive insects or pathogens from other countries, which may disrupt the local ecological balance. Second, if consumers purchase a large number of imported foods, domestic farmers may lose part of their income because local agricultural products may become less competitive. Additionally, over-reliance on imported foods may also lead to over-reliance on other countries, posing a serious risk to national food security, especially in times of crisis.
Nevertheless, such arguments do not necessarily mean that this trend would not exert any beneficial impact. The primary benefit is that it can promote economic development, since it allows consumers to have more choices and encourages them to purchase more products in supermarkets. This can also create more job opportunities in related industries, such as transportation, retail and food production. An additional benefit would be that buying products made in other countries is a form of cultural communication. When food from different countries is available in local supermarkets, consumers can learn more about other cultures through daily consumption. Moreover, more affordable and higher-quality choices can enhance the quality of life.
In summary, I contend that the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages. The problems mentioned above could be resolved if the authority takes control of import quotas and implements stricter rules regarding the control of invasive species at customs.
| 原句问题 | 推荐表达 | 记忆方法 |
|---|---|---|
| depend to sell | on 是介词，后面接 doing。 | |
| the authority should allow people to do something | 题干核心是消费者能买到全球食品，不是政府是否允许。 | |
| food may be carry some creatures | 先写对生态环境的影响，再解释原因。 | |
| make individuals to buy | make somebody do 不加 to；这里 allow 或 make it possible 更自然。 | |
| make progress of the quality of life | enhance the quality of life 是更自然的搭配。 |
雅思 Task 2 利弊类大作文 课堂已确定修改方向，需学生课后继续整理英文版 2.0
题目核心：消费者可以在超市买到世界各地生产的食品，这是积极还是消极的发展。
课堂立场：利大于弊。
主体段一：承认负面影响，包括生态风险、当地农民收入、国家食品安全。
主体段二：说明正面影响，包括经济发展、消费者选择增加、文化交流、生活质量提升。
结尾：说明问题可以通过进口配额、海关检查和更严格政策解决。