练过的材料
- 大船与小船捕鱼业表格题（雅思小作文表格题）：用于讲解表格题审题、收入/成本分段、盈利能力判断和范文写法
- 表格题范文（课堂范文）：用于示范 6.5 分左右的小作文写法，并指出可升级到七分的表达位置
- 下午大作文提纲任务（写作任务）：已完成表格题的同学需要继续写下午大作文提纲
- 地图题小作文（雅思小作文地图题）：有时间的同学可提前写，下午会讲地图题写法
- Row同学阅读任务（课后阅读任务）：老师课末单独提醒 Row同学需要写阅读
写作 · 2026-06-24
Row同学的课程学习报告
雅思小作文表格题：从收入和成本角度判断大船与小船的盈利能力，并练习六分到七分的表达替换
课后复习模块
词汇和表达
- profitable：有利润的；有利可图的
- tend to：倾向于
- hedging words：谨慎表达；不把话说太绝对的词
- generate higher revenue：产生更高收入
- 用于引出比较维度，如 in terms of income-related indicators；就……而言；关于……方面
- 可替换 in terms of，语气更正式；就……而言；关于……方面
纠错重点
- {"rawOrIssue": "tend to do = 试图去做", "correctedOrAdvice": "tend to do = 倾向于", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "它是 hedging word，用来让判断更谨慎，不是 try to do。", "sourceEvidence": "tend to do不是试图做某事的意思啊...倾向于"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "with regarding to", "correctedOrAdvice": "with regard to", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "固定表达中 regard 不加 -ing。", "sourceEvidence": "with Regarding Too...with regard to"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "compare to / compare with 用作比较结构时漏掉 -ed", "correctedOrAdvice": "compared to / compared with", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "读音中可能失去爆破，但写作里要保留 -ed。", "sourceEvidence": "compare to这个是compared要加个ed哦...一定要记得是有那个过去式的"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "把 considering 当作 in terms of 的直接替换", "correctedOrAdvice": "in terms of 可替换为 regarding / concerning / with regard to / in respect of；considering 更偏“考虑到”。", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "中文意思不同：关于 vs 考虑到。", "sourceEvidence": "considering其实也有也是关于的意思...但是他不是替换in terms of的"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "把 divergence 当作数据差距", "correctedOrAdvice": "数据差距用 difference / discrepancy；divergence 更偏意见分歧。", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "divergence 是两个人观点不一样，不是本题的数据差距。", "sourceEvidence": "divergence这个词也是分歧的意思但它不是那个差距"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "用 although / while 写完整从句，表达较长", "correctedOrAdvice": "能写名词结构时，用 despite + noun 更简洁。", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "despite 后接名词，不需要主语和动词，更适合高分写作。", "sourceEvidence": "despite...就一个名词结束了所以特别简单"}
可回读产出
- 本节课写作文章改进版：{"part": "Writing Task 1", "question": "The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators.", "answer": "The table illustrates a comparison between large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators. Overall, large-scale vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats, although the data should be interpreted with caution because some key information, such as fish prices and fuel prices, is not provided.\n\nRegarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels are likely to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, as compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure for this category.\n\nTurning to costs, the fishing industry's expenses mainly consist of labor and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita on large-scale commercial vessels, at at least 25,000 pounds as compared to at most 3,000 pounds on small-scale boats, large-scale vessels employ much fewer crew. The difference in crew size is so large that it may reduce their overall labor costs. Similarly, despite higher oil consumption by each large-scale vessel, the difference in fuel use is much smaller than the discrepancy in labor-related figures. Thus, large-scale fishing still appears to be more cost-efficient overall.", "pairedWithCueCardId": ""}
- IELTS Writing Task 1 table report：The table illustrates a comparison between large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators. Overall, large-scale vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats, although the data should be interpreted with caution because some key information, such as fish prices and fuel prices, is not provided.；Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels are likely to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, as compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure for this category.
课后动作
- 完成本节课讲解的表格题小作文。
- 写作时至少尝试使用本节课的替换表达：in terms of / regarding / concerning / with regard to / in respect of。
- 已经完成表格题的同学，尽快写下午大作文提纲。
- 有时间的话，提前写地图题小作文。
- Row同学完成老师提醒的阅读任务。
一、课堂推进时间轴
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写作分数目标与最低要求
课堂推进：课堂先明确六分写作的底线：字数要写够，内容要尽量写正确。偶发拼写错误可以接受，但不能反复错同一个词。
老师处理：老师解释六分写作首先要满足最低字数，并区分偶发拼写错误和真实不会拼的错误。
老师示范 / 修改方向：小作文和大作文都要写够最低字数；偶发拼写错误如果电脑能识别原词，通常问题不大，但反复拼错会被认为不会。
复习抓手：写作先保证字数过线；优先写自己会且能写对的内容；偶发拼写错误和系统性错误不同
2
六分、6.5分、七分的语言差异
课堂推进：老师用“两个正确表达来回换”和“三个以上表达尝试替换”解释分数差异：六分重在正确，七分重在更多准确替换，6.5分是尝试更多变化但有少量失败。
老师处理：老师讲解六分、6.5分、七分在词汇替换上的区别。
老师示范 / 修改方向：六分可以用两个正确表达交替；七分需要更丰富且正确的替换；6.5分是尝试七分替换但有部分表达出错。
复习抓手：六分写法：少量正确表达稳定使用；七分写法：同义词、词性、语法结构都能替换；6.5分：有七分尝试但准确度不足
3
动态图趋势表达替换
课堂推进：课堂复习动态图常见表达：上升、下降、不变都至少准备三个表达，方便写作时避免重复。
老师处理：老师列出上升、下降、保持不变的动词、名词和副词替换。
老师示范 / 修改方向：上升：rise / grow / increase；名词：a rise / a growth / an increase；大幅：dramatically / significantly / considerably；下降：decline / decrease / fall；不变：remain unchanged / maintain unchanged / stay unchanged。
复习抓手：每类趋势至少背三个表达；动词、名词、副词可以交替使用；稳定正确比盲目堆难词更重要
4
进入本节表格题范文与开头段
课堂推进：老师带大家看本节小作文表格题范文，讲开头段可以用 illustrate、comparative、in terms of 等表达替换原题说法。
老师处理：老师展示并讲解范文开头段的改写方法。
老师示范 / 修改方向：illustrate 可用于替换题目中的展示；comparative 可用于强调比较性质；in terms of 可替换 according to。
复习抓手：开头段要改写题目；according to 可以换成 in terms of / regarding / concerning / with regard to / in respect of / based on；表格题开头可以点出比较关系
5
表格题审题：为什么要重新归类
课堂推进：老师提醒这类表格不能只机械比较数字，因为不同项目单位不同，需要先判断哪些是收入相关，哪些是成本相关。
老师处理：老师引导学生回忆表格与普通表格的区别，并说明不同单位意味着要重新归类。
学生原始输出：Lucas回答：单位不是。
老师示范 / 修改方向：老师肯定 Lucas 的回答，并说明人数、annual catch、cost、gallons 单位不同，不能直接流水账比较。
复习抓手：单位不同的表格要先归类；不要把不同单位数字直接比大小；本题应按收入和成本分段
6
总论：大船更有盈利倾向
课堂推进：老师讲 overview 可以写大船整体更可能盈利，并解释 profitable 和 tend to 的用法。
老师处理：老师讲解 profit、income、costs、profitable、tend to be more profitable 等表达。
学生原始输出：学生将 tend to do 理解为“试图去做”。
老师示范 / 修改方向：tend to do 不是“试图做”，而是“倾向于”。这里用 tend to be more profitable 是因为数据缺失，只能做大致判断。
复习抓手：profit = income - costs；profitable 表示“有利润的、有利可图的”；tend to 是 hedging word，表示“倾向于”
7
为什么本题需要 hedging words
课堂推进：老师解释数据不完整时要用更谨慎的表达，因为题目只给了捕捞重量和油耗数量，没有给单价或油价。
老师处理：老师分析收入和成本计算中缺失的关键信息。
学生原始输出：学生回答影响收入还与质量、钱的部分、单价有关。
老师示范 / 修改方向：收入不只由数量决定，还需要 price；油耗成本也不仅取决于 gallons，还取决于油价。
复习抓手：数据不完整时不要写得过于绝对；income = price × amount / number / sales；hedging words 可以让结论更稳妥
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主体段一：收入相关数据
课堂推进：第一主体段先写收入相关指标：大船 human consumption 的捕捞量更高，并且只有大船有 industrial processing 的捕捞量。
老师处理：老师讲解 income-related indicators 段落如何支持大船更盈利的判断。
老师示范 / 修改方向：generate higher revenue 可替换 earn more / make more money；only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing 表示小船没有这一项收入。
复习抓手：收入段先写 annual catch；generate higher revenue 是更书面化表达；only 可以直接表示另一方没有，不必再写 zero
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主体段二：成本相关数据与让步逻辑
课堂推进：第二主体段写成本：员工总数支持大船成本低，但单个员工工资和油耗数据会反向挑战结论，所以要用 although / though / while / despite 连接。
老师处理：老师带学生判断每一行数据是支持还是反驳“大船更盈利”的总论，并讲连接词选择。
学生原始输出：学生判断第一行员工总数支持结论；annual cost per capita 推翻结论；油耗也有点推翻结论。
老师示范 / 修改方向：支持总论的数据可用 because；反向数据要用 though / although / while / despite 等让步连接。
复习抓手：主体段不是流水账，要服务总论；支持和反向数据要用不同逻辑连接；成本可拆成 labor costs 和 fuel costs
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从 although/while 升级到 despite
课堂推进：老师重点训练把让步从句改成 despite + 名词结构，让表达更简洁、更适合高分写作。
老师处理：老师让学生把 though/while 句子改成 despite 开头的名词结构。
学生原始输出：学生尝试：despite higher oil consumption of large scale vessels。
老师示范 / 修改方向：Though large-scale commercial ships have a higher... 可改为 despite the higher annual costs per capita；While each large-scale vessel consumes more oil 可改为 despite higher oil consumption of large-scale vessels。
复习抓手：despite 后面接名词，不接完整句子；名词结构通常比动词从句更简洁；把动词 consume 转成名词 consumption
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比较、差距和因果表达
课堂推进：老师讲比较数据时可以用 as compared to、versus、compared with，也讲 difference / discrepancy 和 thus / therefore / hence 等结果连接词。
老师处理：老师解释比较表达、缩写规则、差距表达和结果连接词。
学生原始输出：学生回答：compared to；versus；difference；discrepancy。
老师示范 / 修改方向：compared to / compared with 要有 -ed；versus 可以写作 vs.；discrepancy 可替换 difference；thus 可替换 therefore。
复习抓手：比较：as compared to / compared with / versus；差距：difference / discrepancy；因此：therefore / thus / hence / thereby
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课堂结尾复盘与作业
课堂推进：课堂最后复盘了本节课的替换表达，并布置课后写作任务：完成这篇表格小作文，已经完成的同学尽快写下午大作文提纲，有时间再写地图题小作文。
老师处理：老师组织学生轮流复述 in terms of 的替换、比较表达和差距表达，并布置课后任务。
学生原始输出：学生轮流回答：in terms of / in respect of / regarding / with regard to / concerning；compared to / versus；difference / discrepancy。
老师示范 / 修改方向：老师纠正 with regarding to 应为 with regard to；说明 concerning 是“关于”，considering 更偏“考虑到”，不适合作为 in terms of 的直接替换。
复习抓手：课堂表达要能当场复述；with regard to 不是 with regarding to；considering 和 concerning 用法不同
13
学生个人任务提醒
课堂推进：老师在结尾提醒 Row同学需要完成阅读任务，并询问昨天听力任务情况。
老师处理：老师点名提醒星辰写阅读，并追问听力任务。
学生原始输出：Row同学：不会不为老师我会做我会做的。
老师示范 / 修改方向：老师表示相信学生会完成任务。
复习抓手：课后除写作任务外，Row同学还有阅读相关任务需要完成；听力任务状态课堂中没有形成明确完成证据
二、本节课亮点表现
本节课重点讲了写作六分、6.5分、七分之间的区别：先写对，再增加准确替换。
课堂围绕一篇表格题范文展开，核心逻辑是把数据分成 income-related indicators（收入相关指标）和 costs（成本）。
老师重点训练了 in terms of 的替换、compared to / versus 的比较表达、despite + 名词的高分让步结构。
Row同学在结尾被提醒要完成阅读任务，并回应自己会做。
三、本节课用了哪些材料
- 大船与小船捕鱼业表格题（雅思小作文表格题）：用于讲解表格题审题、收入/成本分段、盈利能力判断和范文写法
- 表格题范文（课堂范文）：用于示范 6.5 分左右的小作文写法，并指出可升级到七分的表达位置
- 下午大作文提纲任务（写作任务）：已完成表格题的同学需要继续写下午大作文提纲
- 地图题小作文（雅思小作文地图题）：有时间的同学可提前写，下午会讲地图题写法
- Row同学阅读任务（课后阅读任务）：老师课末单独提醒 Row同学需要写阅读
四、学生课堂输出
表格题审题
单位不是
tend to do 理解
试图去做
in terms of 替换复盘
in Terms of InRespectOf regarding
with regard to 复盘
with Regarding Too
比较表达复盘
compared to
比较表达复盘
versus
差距表达复盘
difference
差距表达复盘
disgrapency
Row同学课后任务回应
不会不为老师我会做我会做的
五、本节课写作文章改进版
按课堂已讲方向整理的课后复习改进版；表格具体题干和全部原始数据未完整出现在逐字稿中，因此保留课堂明确提到的数据和逻辑，不补写未出现的新数据。
The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators.
The table illustrates a comparison between large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators. Overall, large-scale vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats, although the data should be interpreted with caution because some key information, such as fish prices and fuel prices, is not provided. Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels are likely to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, as compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure for this category. Turning to costs, the fishing industry's expenses mainly consist of labor and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita on large-scale commercial vessels, at at least 25,000 pounds as compared to at most 3,000 pounds on small-scale boats, large-scale vessels employ much fewer crew. The difference in crew size is so large that it may reduce their overall labor costs. Similarly, despite higher oil consumption by each large-scale vessel, the difference in fuel use is much smaller than the discrepancy in labor-related figures. Thus, large-scale fishing still appears to be more cost-efficient overall.
六、本节课纠错
| 原句问题 | 推荐表达 | 记忆方法 |
|---|---|---|
七、定稿作文 / 改写方向
IELTS Writing Task 1 table report 按课堂讲解方向整理的课后复习改进版；非逐字稿中完整最终定稿
The table illustrates a comparison between large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several fishing-related indicators. Overall, large-scale vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats, although the data should be interpreted with caution because some key information, such as fish prices and fuel prices, is not provided.
Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels are likely to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, as compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure for this category.
Turning to costs, the fishing industry's expenses mainly consist of labor and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita on large-scale commercial vessels, at at least 25,000 pounds as compared to at most 3,000 pounds on small-scale boats, large-scale vessels employ much fewer crew. The difference in crew size is so large that it may reduce their overall labor costs. Similarly, despite higher oil consumption by each large-scale vessel, the difference in fuel use is much smaller than the discrepancy in labor-related figures. Thus, large-scale fishing still appears to be more cost-efficient overall.
八、课后任务
- 完成本节课讲解的表格题小作文。
- 写作时至少尝试使用本节课的替换表达：in terms of / regarding / concerning / with regard to / in respect of。
- 已经完成表格题的同学，尽快写下午大作文提纲。
- 有时间的话，提前写地图题小作文。
- Row同学完成老师提醒的阅读任务。
九、方法和词汇
方法总结
- 先正确，再替换
- 每类表达至少背三个
- 单位不同的表格先归类
- overview 只写总判断
- 反向数据用让步结构
- 把从句压缩成名词结构
- 用下限对上限凸显差距
补充词汇
- rise / growth / increase：上升；增长
- decline / decrease / fall：下降
- remain unchanged / maintained unchanged / stayed unchanged：保持不变
- dramatically / significantly / considerably：大幅地；显著地
- slowly / slightly / minimally：缓慢地；小幅地；极小幅地
- prestigious：有声望的；名校/知名机构常用