练过的材料
- 捕鱼船只表格题（雅思小作文表格题）：用于讲解表格题如何按收入和成本归类、如何写 overview 和主体段
- 小作文六点五分范文（老师示范范文）：作为学生课后完成表格题作文前的参考范文
- 下午大作文提纲任务（写作练习任务）：已写完表格题的同学继续完成下午要讲的大作文提纲
- 地图题小作文（雅思小作文地图题）：有时间的同学可以提前写，下午会讲地图题写法
写作 · 2026-06-24
Luna同学的课程学习报告
雅思小作文表格题：按收入和成本分类写作，并提升替换表达
课后复习模块
词汇和表达
- profitable：有利润的；有利可图的
- profit：利润
- income：收入
- costs：成本
- 用于开头段改写或主体段引出某一类数据；关于……；就……方面而言
- 可替换 in terms of / about；关于……
纠错重点
- {"rawOrIssue": "tend to do = 试图去做", "correctedOrAdvice": "tend to do = 倾向于做某事", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "“试图做”不是 tend to 的意思；本题里 tend to be more profitable 表示“倾向于更有利润”。", "sourceEvidence": "tend to do不是试图做某事的意思啊哎倾向于"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "只会两个表达就反复换", "correctedOrAdvice": "每一类至少准备三个正确表达", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "两个表达更像六分保底；三个及以上且正确，才更接近七分替换。", "sourceEvidence": "每一种说法都建议大家背三个"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "把不同单位的数据直接比大小", "correctedOrAdvice": "先按收入和成本分类，再服务于 overall 判断", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "人数、吨、英镑、加仑单位不同，不能写成流水账。", "sourceEvidence": "它单位不一样你是要做运算你需要再重新归类一下"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "overview 里写太多细节数据", "correctedOrAdvice": "overview 只写最笼统结论，例如大船整体更盈利", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "overview 不需要给数据，也不需要展开每一项支撑。", "sourceEvidence": "over绕是不需要给任何数据的也不需要给我什么细节的一些支撑"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "although / though 后面写完整句，表达较啰嗦", "correctedOrAdvice": "能写 despite + 名词短语时优先用 despite", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "despite 后面接名词，表达更简洁，也更适合书面写作。", "sourceEvidence": "强烈推荐大家如果你会写就写despite"}
- {"rawOrIssue": "compare to / compare with 漏掉 -ed", "correctedOrAdvice": "写成 compared to / compared with", "reasonOrMemoryTip": "读音中可能失去爆破，但书写时要保留过去分词 -ed。", "sourceEvidence": "compare to这个是compared要加个ed哦"}
可回读产出
- 本节课写作文章改进版：{"type": "IELTS Writing Task 1 improved essay", "answer": "The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several indicators related to catch, labour and fuel use. Overall, large-scale commercial vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats.\n\nRegarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels appear to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure in this category.\n\nTurning to costs, fishing industry expenses mainly consist of labour and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita offered by large-scale commercial vessels, at least 25,000 pounds compared with at most 3,000 pounds for small-scale boats, they employ much fewer crew, with only 500,000 workers versus 12 million on small-scale boats. The discrepancy is so large as over 80 times, suggesting that total labour costs may still be lower for large-scale vessels.\n\nAs for fuel cost, despite the higher oil consumption of each large-scale vessel, the difference is only about 10 times, much less than that of labour costs. Thus, large-scale fishing is still more cost-efficient overall."}
- IELTS Writing Task 1 table essay：The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several indicators related to catch, labour and fuel use. Overall, large-scale commercial vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats.；Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels appear to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure in this category.
课后动作
- 完成本节课讲解的捕鱼船只表格题小作文。
- 已经完成表格题作文的同学，继续写下午要讲的大作文提纲。
- 有时间的同学可以提前尝试地图题小作文。
一、课堂推进时间轴
1
明确六分写作底线
课堂推进：课堂先强调写作保底策略：小作文和大作文都要先写够最低字数，并保证自己写出来的内容尽量正确。
老师处理：老师解释六分作文的核心要求：字数过线、拼写语法搭配尽量正确、只写自己真正会的表达。
老师示范 / 修改方向：偶发拼写错误如果机器能识别原词，一般问题不大；但反复拼错会被判断为不会。
复习抓手：写够最低字数限制是保底要求；正确性比堆复杂表达更重要；偶发拼写错误和系统性不会拼不同
2
区分六分、六点五分和七分
课堂推进：老师用替换数量解释分数差异：六分可以稳定使用少量正确表达；六点五分是尝试更多替换但有错误；七分需要更多正确变化。
老师处理：老师用 rose dramatically、rose significantly、grew dramatically、a dramatic growth 等例子说明动词、副词和词性变化。
老师示范 / 修改方向：rose dramatically 可以替换为 rose significantly、grew dramatically、grew significantly，也可以换成 a dramatic growth。
复习抓手：六分：少量正确表达反复使用；六点五分：尝试更多替换但部分出错；七分：更多正确替换，包括词性变化
3
整理动态图常用替换组
课堂推进：老师带学生整理小作文动态图常见表达，每一类至少背三个，帮助学生从只会两种表达走向更多可替换表达。
老师处理：老师按上升、下降、保持不变、大幅变化、小幅变化分别列举动词、名词、副词和形容词。
学生原始输出：declined；decrease；fall
老师示范 / 修改方向：上升可以用 rise、grow、increase；名词可以用 a rise、a growth、an increase；大幅副词可以用 dramatically、significantly、considerably。
复习抓手：每一类表达至少准备三个；动词、名词、副词都可以形成替换；替换必须先保证正确
4
进入表格题范文讲解
课堂推进：老师开始讲一篇捕鱼船只表格题范文，先从开头段和概述段说明如何改写题目与判断总体趋势。
老师处理：老师说明 illustrate、comparative、in terms of、based on 等表达可用于开头段替换。
老师示范 / 修改方向：according to four indicators 可以换成 in terms of four indicators，也可以使用 regarding、concerning、with regard to、in respect of、based on。
复习抓手：开头段可以改写题目表达；according to 可替换为 in terms of / based on；comparative 可用于比较类图表
5
分析表格题分段逻辑
课堂推进：老师引导学生发现这道表格题的单位不同，不能直接流水账比较，需要按收入和成本重新归类。
老师处理：老师把 annual catch 归为收入相关，把员工数量、员工年成本和油耗归为成本相关。
学生原始输出：单位不是
老师示范 / 修改方向：这类题不能只写哪个数字大，而要先判断哪些数据影响收入，哪些数据影响成本，再判断哪类船更盈利。
复习抓手：不同单位的数据需要先分类；收入相关数据和成本相关数据应分段；overview 可写大船整体更盈利
6
讲解 profitable 与 hedging words
课堂推进：老师解释 profitable（有利润的）和 tend to（倾向于），并说明为什么本题适合使用 hedging words（模糊限定词）。
老师处理：老师说明利润等于收入减成本，并指出数据缺少鱼的单价、油价等信息，所以结论需要保留估算感。
学生原始输出：试图去做
老师示范 / 修改方向：tend to do 不是“试图做某事”，而是“倾向于”。
复习抓手：profit 是利润；profitable 是有利润的；tend to 表示倾向于；数据不完整时可以使用 hedging words
7
收入段写法
课堂推进：老师示范收入段应先写大船在 human consumption 捕捞量上更高，再写只有大船有 industrial processing 捕捞量。
老师处理：老师讲解 generate higher revenue、human consumption、industrial processing、only 的用法。
老师示范 / 修改方向：Large-scale commercial vessels generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption and their exclusive annual catch for industrial processing.
复习抓手：generate higher revenue 可替换 earn more；only 表示另一方没有，不必再写 zero；收入段要服务于“大船更盈利”的判断
8
成本段让步逻辑
课堂推进：老师带学生判断哪些成本数据支持结论，哪些成本数据反向，需要用 because、though、while、despite 等连接。
老师处理：老师逐项分析员工数量、每人年成本和油耗，并指出支持结论的数据用 because，反向数据用 though / while / despite。
学生原始输出：支持；推翻
老师示范 / 修改方向：虽然大船每名员工工资更高、每艘船油耗更多，但员工总数更少，所以整体仍可能更节省成本。
复习抓手：支持结论的数据可用 because 连接；反向数据可用 though / while / despite 连接；成本段要解释正反数据如何共同支持整体判断
9
把 though 句升级为 despite 名词结构
课堂推进：老师示范如何把含动词的 though 句改成 despite + 名词结构，让句子更简洁、更像高分写法。
老师处理：老师要求学生把 Though large-scale commercial ships have a higher annual cost per capita 改成 despite 开头的表达。
学生原始输出：Despite 后面怎么写；改为那个名词；offered by
老师示范 / 修改方向：despite the higher annual costs per capita offered by large-scale commercial ships
复习抓手：despite 后面通常接名词或名词短语；把句子变成名词结构可以更简洁；简洁准确的名词结构更适合写作
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补充人员与比较表达
课堂推进：老师补充 crew、employee、staff、professionals 等人员表达，并说明 versus、compared to / compared with 的比较用法。
老师处理：老师解释 crew 更贴合船只语境，并说明 VS 是 versus 的缩写，compare to / compare with 要写成 compared。
学生原始输出：employee；staff；personal
老师示范 / 修改方向：crew 专指船员或机组人员；versus 可写作 vs. 或 v.s.；compared to / compared with 中 compared 要有 -ed。
复习抓手：crew 比 worker 更贴合船只语境；versus 可以表示 A 对比 B；compared to / compared with 要保留 -ed
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讲解 discrepancy、thus 与 cost-efficient
课堂推进：老师讲解 discrepancy（差距）、thus（因此）和 cost-efficient（成本效率高的），并把它们放进成本段结论中。
老师处理：老师解释 that of labour costs 中 that 指代 difference，并比较 difference 与 discrepancy。
学生原始输出：difference；disgrapency；divergence
老师示范 / 修改方向：discrepancy 表示差距；divergence 更偏向意见分歧，不适合这里替换 difference。
复习抓手：discrepancy 可替换 difference；thus 可替换 therefore；cost-efficient 表示成本效率更高
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课堂收尾与课后任务
课堂推进：课堂最后回顾了本节课的替换表达，并布置学生课后完成表格题作文；已经写完的同学继续写下午的大作文提纲，有时间可写地图题小作文。
老师处理：老师组织学生轮流复述 in terms of、in respect of、regarding、with regard to、concerning、compared to、versus、discrepancy 等表达，并布置任务。
学生原始输出：in terms of；in respect of；regarding；with regard to；concerning；compared to；versus；discrepancy
老师示范 / 修改方向：considering 不等于 in terms of；be considered as / be regarded as / be seen as 是另一组“被视为”的表达。
复习抓手：课后要完成本节表格题作文；已完成者写下午大作文提纲；有时间可尝试地图题小作文
二、本节课亮点表现
本节课先明确写作保底思路：写够字数、保证正确、只写自己会的表达。
老师用六分、六点五分、七分的区别讲清楚“替换表达”的作用：六分要稳定正确，七分要有更多正确变化。
本节表格题重点不是算数学，而是把数据按 income（收入）和 costs（成本）分段，写出大船更 profitable（有利润的）的整体判断。
课堂重点练习了 in terms of、regarding、concerning、with regard to、in respect of 等“关于 / 就某方面而言”的替换。
老师示范了如何把 though 句改成 despite + 名词结构，让句子更简洁、更适合写作。
三、本节课用了哪些材料
- 捕鱼船只表格题（雅思小作文表格题）：用于讲解表格题如何按收入和成本归类、如何写 overview 和主体段
- 小作文六点五分范文（老师示范范文）：作为学生课后完成表格题作文前的参考范文
- 下午大作文提纲任务（写作练习任务）：已写完表格题的同学继续完成下午要讲的大作文提纲
- 地图题小作文（雅思小作文地图题）：有时间的同学可以提前写，下午会讲地图题写法
四、学生课堂输出
判断表格题特点
单位不是
tend to 含义判断
试图去做
in terms of 替换
In respect to
下降表达
declined；decrease；fall
人员表达替换
employee；staff；personal
比较表达复述
compared to；versus；vs.
差距表达复述
difference；disgrapency；divergence
五、本节课写作文章改进版
按课堂已讲方向整理的课后复习改进版；数据、分段逻辑和表达均来自本次逐字稿中老师讲解的范文方向。
The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several indicators related to catch, labour and fuel use. Overall, large-scale commercial vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats. Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels appear to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure in this category. Turning to costs, fishing industry expenses mainly consist of labour and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita offered by large-scale commercial vessels, at least 25,000 pounds compared with at most 3,000 pounds for small-scale boats, they employ much fewer crew, with only 500,000 workers versus 12 million on small-scale boats. The discrepancy is so large as over 80 times, suggesting that total labour costs may still be lower for large-scale vessels. As for fuel cost, despite the higher oil consumption of each large-scale vessel, the difference is only about 10 times, much less than that of labour costs. Thus, large-scale fishing is still more cost-efficient overall.
六、本节课纠错
| 原句问题 | 推荐表达 | 记忆方法 |
|---|---|---|
七、定稿作文 / 改写方向
IELTS Writing Task 1 table essay 按课堂讲解方向整理的课后复习改进版，不是逐字稿中学生现场完整定稿
The table compares large-scale commercial vessels and small-scale boats in terms of several indicators related to catch, labour and fuel use. Overall, large-scale commercial vessels tend to be more profitable than small-scale boats.
Regarding income-related indicators, large-scale commercial vessels appear to generate higher revenue. This can be seen from their larger annual catch for human consumption, at 29 million tons, compared to 24 million tons for small-scale boats. More importantly, only large-scale commercial vessels provide annual catch for industrial processing, at 22 million tons, while small-scale boats have no figure in this category.
Turning to costs, fishing industry expenses mainly consist of labour and fuel. Despite the higher annual cost per capita offered by large-scale commercial vessels, at least 25,000 pounds compared with at most 3,000 pounds for small-scale boats, they employ much fewer crew, with only 500,000 workers versus 12 million on small-scale boats. The discrepancy is so large as over 80 times, suggesting that total labour costs may still be lower for large-scale vessels.
As for fuel cost, despite the higher oil consumption of each large-scale vessel, the difference is only about 10 times, much less than that of labour costs. Thus, large-scale fishing is still more cost-efficient overall.
八、课后任务
- 完成本节课讲解的捕鱼船只表格题小作文。
- 已经完成表格题作文的同学，继续写下午要讲的大作文提纲。
- 有时间的同学可以提前尝试地图题小作文。
九、方法和词汇
方法总结
- 六分保底法：先保证字数和正确性
- 每类表达至少背三个
- 表格题先按逻辑分类，不直接流水账
- 收入段 + 成本段分段
- 反向数据用让步连接
- 用 despite + 名词短语压缩句子
补充词汇
- prestigious university：知名大学；有声望的大学
- endorsement：背书；担保式认可
- be regarded as：被视为；被看作
- be considered as：被认为是；被视为
- nostalgia：怀旧的感受