雅萱同学的课程学习报告

目标设定与问题诊断

课堂推进：老师说明本节课先集中修改一篇小作文，重点解决基础语法和句式问题。

老师处理：展示学生作文当前得分，设定课堂目标，决定先改第一篇再处理第二篇。

老师示范 / 修改方向：目标是一次达到可评分水平；当前主要问题是语法错误较严重。

复习抓手：雅思小作文先保语法正确；再追求复杂句式与同义替换

Overall段主旨确定

课堂推进：老师带学生重新读题，确定图表写的是三类支出（three categories），其中红色代表 food and drink（饮食），在大多数年龄段都是最大支出。

老师处理：引导学生理解 categories 指三种支出类别，不是"年轻人"，并确定 overall 句型。

学生原始输出：overall the expenditure on young；The expenditure on young people

老师示范 / 修改方向：Food and drink was the primary expenditure among most age groups.

复习抓手：overall 要写最主要趋势；category 是类别；primary 表示最主要的

分组表达模板

课堂推进：老师教学生用被动句式给数据分组，并用 one including / another involving / the last including 来罗列不同年龄段。

老师处理：纠正主动语态错误，讲解 people aged 结构，确定三组年龄范围。

学生原始输出：原来的分组表达比较混乱，有 who aged 等错误写法

老师示范 / 修改方向：The data can be roughly divided into three groups: one including people aged under 30, another involving people aged 30 to 60 and those aged over 75, and the last including people aged 60 to 75.

复习抓手：数据分组用被动语态；people aged + 数字；one including / another involving / the last including 结构

第一组细节与主谓一致

课堂推进：老师指出 restaurant 和 hotel 要加 s 变复数，主语是 a and b 时用 were；并用 nearly 替代 just below，更强调数值大。

老师处理：纠正单复数错误，解释"裸奔"（不加 s）问题，示范 nearly 的用法。

学生原始输出：in the first group, restaurant and hotel was；making up just below

老师示范 / 修改方向：Restaurants and hotels were the most significant way of spending their money among the youngest generation, making up nearly 15%.

复习抓手：可数名词要加复数 s；a and b 作主语时用 were；nearly 比 just below 更强调"大"

比较结构与介词指代

课堂推进：老师讲解"谁超过谁"的比较句型，强调 that / those 指代前面名词时要重复介词，并注意 which 从句作插入语时用逗号隔开。

老师处理：用饼图例子解释介词重复规则，纠正 that 后缺少 on 的问题。

学生原始输出：expenditure on entertainment which made up just over 百分之六 and that；The figures for exceeded that

老师示范 / 修改方向：The expenditure on entertainment, which accounted for just over 6%, was exceeded by that on restaurants and hotels.

复习抓手：that / those 指代时要重复介词；which 从句作插入语用逗号隔开；避免近距离重复 make up

第二组转换与对比

课堂推进：老师教学生从第一组转到第二组时用 by contrast，因为 food and drink 从最后一名变成第一名，是截然相反的变化。

老师处理：解释 however 和 by contrast 的区别，帮助学生写出 food and drink cost most in the second group。

学生原始输出：food and drink cost more most in the second group；By contrast in the second group, food and drink cost most in a range between just above and just under exceeded that

老师示范 / 修改方向：By contrast, in the second group, food and drink cost most. The spending on this category by people aged 30 to 45 and 45 to 60, at just under 18 and 24 respectively, exceeded that on entertainment.

复习抓手：by contrast 表示截然相反；however 表示普通转折；cost most 表示花费最多；括号里可补充数字

第三组与同义替换

课堂推进：老师继续纠正第三组表达，强调 food and drink ranked second，以及可用 allocated to / used on / was on 等替换 make up。

老师处理：纠正分组错误，讲解 ranked second at...，提供多种占比表达。

学生原始输出：the primary expenditure on people who older than；food and drink ranked second；the last just over six

老师示范 / 修改方向：However, when it comes to the last group, for people aged over 75, food and drink ranked second at just above... The remaining total expenditure was used on...

复习抓手：ranked second at + 数字；remaining 表示剩余的；可用 was used on / allocated to 替换 make up

进入第二篇图表：交通方式

课堂推进：老师让学生开始修改第二篇关于交通方式的小作文，先改开头段和主体段第一句。

老师处理：指导学生打开任务页面，先修改 transportation 图表的开头段与主体段。

学生原始输出：The bar chart present data on the transportation methods for population；car was the dominant way of trans；another significant method was buses

老师示范 / 修改方向：The bar chart illustrates data on the means of transport used by the faculty and undergraduates to travel to a university, including changes caused by the introduction of... Cars were the dominant mode of transportation... another significant method was by bus.

复习抓手：开头段可用 illustrate / present data on；means of transport 是交通方式；among 表示在……之中；including changes caused by 表示包含……带来的变化

课堂收尾与课后安排

课堂推进：由于两篇作文错误类型类似，老师让学生课后继续修改第二篇，巩固课堂讲过的句式。

老师处理：布置课后任务，让学生分屏修改另一篇，并请其他老师先查看。

学生原始输出：我写的时候我就知道我写不出来。就是好多乱七八糟的写的。

老师示范 / 修改方向：老师总结主要问题是"谁超过谁"句式还没完全明白，要求学生回去研究。

复习抓手：课后继续修改第二篇；复习比较句型与介词指代